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雅思写作【犯罪类话题】写作思路分析及文章结构总结!

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  雅思写作【犯罪类话题】写作思路分析及文章结构总结!今天继续来唠嗑一下“犯罪”类的话题。有些老铁可能会说,上星期不是才说过吗?怎么这星期又说一次?是又水了一期范文吗?

雅思写作【犯罪类话题】写作思路分析及文章结构总结!
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  对此,我只能说,这位老铁看得真准!不过也没办法,今年出题,“犯罪”和“法律”类的题目,可能会比较多。而且大多数高中的老铁,对这类话题可能不太熟悉,所以多讲一期。

  虽然同是“犯罪”,但侧重点有一点不一样,今天这篇会比较侧重是“青少年” 犯罪,但“犯罪增加“这个内核是一样的。对于记得我们上一期内容的老铁,这期的题目就非常简单了。有空可以对比一下,这篇文章,和上周的那篇文章,有什么异同点。对比之后,我们就可以知道,有什么东西能在“犯罪”话题里反复使用了。

  文章结构:

  第一段:交代背景,总结全文

  第二段:回答第一问题(青少年犯罪 增加的原因)

  第三段:回答第一问题(更深层原因)

  第四段:回答第二问题(解决方案)

  第五段:总结

  范文示例

  Sample text

  In many parts of the world, children and teenagers are committing more crimes. What are the causes of the phenomenon? How should they be punished?

  Teenage crimes are increasingly common nowadays, but we can also take steps to reduce the harm that it does to the society. This essay will analyze the reasons for this phenomenon and the measures to address these problems.

  Family and parents’ education are the main cause of teenagers’ psychological problems, which leads to the increase of teenage crimes in the future. When children are still too young to tell right from wrong, many parents do not set a good example. They swear or even use violence to teach their children, who are excellent imitators, and they simply just copy their parents’ mode of solving problems when they grow up. It is no surprise but unreasonable family education in the past that results in the common anti-social behavior among the teenagers in the modern society.

  What is more, Internet is another major reason. Since the birth of Internet, having access to information, including the violent and disrespectful one, becomes unprecedently easy. After spending too much time on the Internet, many young people sometimes forget that they are in the real world, in which their real actions will have actual consequences. It is widely reported that one of the main reasons for the rampant school shooting can be traced back to what computer games that the killers were usually playing in their daily life. Unrestricted access to information undoubtedly increases the possibility of crimes among teenagers.

  To address this worrying issue, parents first need to behave reasonably in front of their children. Instead of adopting violence as a method to teach their children, parents need to show them how to think logically, and solve problems in a more reasonable and legal manner. As for the government, they cannot rely on harsh punishments only, either. First, they need to require the companies to set stricter regulation for all teenagers to use the Internet. For example, YouTube sets age limits when the videos are related with crimes, blood or violence. If the teenagers only commit crimes for forgivable reasons, such as being unaware, or being too poor, it is the government ‘s responsibility to guide them to walk on the right path. Not everyone is born with the family to teach them what is right or wrong. However, if teenagers commit serious crimes, such as murder or arson, then the government needs to follow the laws to give them punishments, because some results of the crimes are irrevocable. Without serious results, it is highly likely for them to make those mistakes over and over again.

  To conclude, parents can teach their children in a more reasonable way, and people need to be aware of the difference between the real world and Internet, so that we can have a society with less conflicts.

  New words and expressions:

  Teenage crime n. 青少年犯罪

  threat n. /v 威胁

  violent adj. 暴力的

  disrespectful adj. 不尊重人的

  怎么样?各位老铁都能找出两篇文章有什么异同点么 ?

  以上内容由西蒙弗雷泽大学教育学硕士,英语专业8级,环球教育•华南总校人气雅思写作Johnson老师原创。

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